¿Qué os parece?

Esta historia no la he escrito yo, pero me gustaría que me dijeseis si esta bien escrita o no y quiera que no pues para leeros esta buena historia, esta en inglés.




A man walked to register in a otel, the recepcionist said that he had to go to a room-next door to other that it hadn´t got number, the man went to his room and he went to bed. During the night, he needed to know why the room hadn´t got number. He left tothe room and hetried to go in the bedroom, he bent and hesaw through the lock.

In a corner tothe room, there was a women, the man tried to knock the door but, at last he made nothing, doubtfully come back to his room.

The next day, he returned to see through the lock, in this moment, he saw everything red, he thought that she realized that someone to the lock and she covered with something, later, he decided to ask the recepcionist, he told him there was a women that she died there, she was normal except for something, her eyes were red.

Espero que os guste y bueno, ya pondré más.

me parece que has abierto 2 veces el mismo tema, y que la madre de rafter cada dia es mas zorra


Y bueno no esque no entienda el ingles, sino que paso de leer nada en ingles xDDDD

Matacanis escribió:me parece que has abierto 2 veces el mismo tema, y que la madre de rafter cada dia es mas zorra

Calla mamá.

RafterOMG escribió:

Matacanis escribió:me parece que has abierto 2 veces el mismo tema, y que la madre de rafter cada dia es mas zorra

Calla mamá.

A LA CAMA!!!!


PD: aqui tienes tu peluche de lenin, acabo de sacarlo de la secadora, ahora vuelve a ser tan suave, esponjoso, despota y asesino como siempre

Bueno, sinceramente me ha parecido muy poco original y encima penco.

Corrijo errores:

A man walked to register in a hotel, the recepcionist said that he had to go to a room next to another that hadn´t got a number, the man went to his room and he went to bed.
During the night, he needed to know why the room hadn´t got any number. He left towards the room and he tried to go in the bedroom, he bent and he looked through the lock.

In a corner of the room there was a woman, the man tried to knock on the door but nothing happened. Doubtfully, he went back to his room.

The next day, he returned to see through the lock. That time, he saw everything red, he thought that she realized that someone was looking through the lock and she had covered it with something. Later, he decided to ask the recepcionist. She told him there was a woman that had died there, she was normal except for something, her eyes were red.

Argumento pobre la verdad.

Vuelvo a repetir que la historia NO ES MIA :l

Nadie ha dicho que lo fuera.
El caso esque las habitaciones de hoteles están ya vistas, y que el hombre se levantase en mitad de la noche a mirar en la habitación de al lado por curiosidad.... poco convincente. También está el factor de que al ser de noche, las luces de la otra habitación estarían apagadas y no tiene explicación que viese entonces a la mujer en una esquina a través del cerrojo.
Y solo dejo mi crítica porque.. sí, porque has pedido una opinión y una corrección. Si tu amigo tiene que entrgarla a una profesora o algo más le vale corregir los errores.